国外Essay代写怎么做好段落？-Meeloun原创

顾含爱学习

　　有些留学生在完成Essay写作时经常能想到好多论点，但是总感觉这些论点只是机械的罗列，彼此之间都是独立的，并没有组成一个完整的段落。今天小编就为大家分享几个小方法，让整个段落看起来是一个整体，而不是一盘散沙。

Essay代写

　　今天主要分享的是Essay代写内容连贯性的问题。下面是老师的打分标准：

　　高阶：logically organises information and ideas;there is clear progression throughout

　　中阶：presents information with some organisation but there may be a lack of overall progression

　　举个例子：

　　闲暇时间，年轻人是否应该多在家跟家人在一起，还是出去“浪”？

　　错误示范：

　　The young who spend more time at home could certainly strengthen the family relationship.It is likely that older family members can give them useful suggestions in their study and career development.The parents are more experienced in life.When the young stay with the family members,they will feel protected and will not feel lonely.

　　正确示范：

　　The young spending more time at home could bring numerous benefits,and the most obvious one is that the family relationship is certainly strengthened.It is doubtless that the longer the time people spend together,the more intimate they will become.Besides,older family members,who are more experienced in life,can give young people useful suggestions on their study and career development,such as how to cope with pressure from the employer and how to arrange time properly when task is too challenging.

　　上面的错误示范中，成为散沙的主要原因有：

　　1.想写的东西太多

　　2.论点之间没有联系

　　3.句子之间无连接词

　　增加连贯性的方法

　　1.适当减一些论点

　　2.论证内容丰富一些

　　3.句子之间多使用连接词

　　1.减少论点数量

　　同学们在写很多论点的时候，写到后面经常会跑偏。毕竟那些话题里最切题的论点就那几个。同学们后面列举的看似相关的内容，有时候真的不太需要。段落方面找我们的客服（WeCha@：allen52116）了解吧！

　　所以，同学们可以放弃多余的论点，围绕几个关键论点，用不同的角度或者论证方式充分去展开。效果一定比之前要好的多。