Supplemental Essay范文展示及结构分析

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很多国外大学都需要一篇Supplemental Essay，简言之就是问：你为什么想学你想学的专业？ 同时字数要求大约在300字，这可难住了我们很多申请小伙伴们，要在简短的字数里写好一篇Supplemental Essay确实不容易，下面就为大家分享Supplemental Essay范文展示及结构分析。

我们来分别看两个例子：

短文书：My decision to major in Electrical Engineering was inspired by my desire to improve security through technology. When I lived in Mexico, my father’s restaurant security system lacked the ability to protect our property from robbers, who would break in multiple times a year. Thanks to the influence of my cousin, who now studies Autonomous Systems, I developed an interest in electrical engineering. I am inspired to not only improve my father’s security system, but contributing to security innovations for larger companies and perhaps, one day, national security. (89 words)

文章结构：

1、论点：我想通过技术来改善安全状况

2、劫匪闯入爸爸的餐馆

3、表哥教我自主系统的知识

4、未来：与大公司合作或从事国家安全工作

中长文书：

Imagine all the stars in the universe. The brain has a thousand times the number of synapses, making neurological errors a near certainty. I learned this fact firsthand as a 14 year-old, when I suffered from sleepless nights because of an uncomfortable, indescribable feeling in my leg. It took months of appointments and tests to be told it was a condition called cortical dysplasia. Even after the diagnosis, there is no cure.

I am lucky. My condition does not severely affect my quality of life. However, I know this is not the case for everyone. After this experience, I took AP Biology and attended a neuroscience program, which reinforced the subject as my future calling. One of the most impactful lectures discussed the plight of healthcare in developing nations. Newborns with extreme neurological deficits are common, but finding treatments is not. Without prenatal care, this is becoming a growing epidemic, leaving millions of children helpless.

With a degree in neuroscience, I will gain a strong understanding of neural tube development and neuronal migration in infants. I will then become a neurologist, specializing in pediatric care. I hope to work for humanitarian organizations, such as Doctors Without Borders, in Africa, where HIV and polio are rampant, as are numerous other diseases.

Imagine the stars once more. From across the world, I will look at the same stars in the future, as I help children secure the ability to not only look at the stars, but do much more. (247 words)

文章结构：

1、引子：将星星的数量与大脑中的连接数联系起来；

2、学校课程及活动：学习发展中国家的医疗保健知识；

3、学习展望：说说为什么是神经科学（具体点），以及我拿到学位后会做什么；

4、扣题：回到开端（星星）并展望未来；

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